Poetry in Courtship

I might not like the Tale of Genji but I really like the idea of love via poetry, and the author of the novel is skilled in both poetry and prose. So I admire the story for the story but I hate the character? It is a bit like Wuthering Heights (I hate Heathcliff.)

Anyway, I came up with a Heian version of ByaHomu. The original version was Cinderella like, which after a bit of research I'm not sure it will fly. So this is the revamped version which loses some of the original I feel. I also have no idea what the convention is for the English version of Heian poetry, so I just wrote with the same subject matter but with none of the syllabic conventions.

( The slow blossoming of a relationship )

Omg this is such schmoop but AT LEAST I FINISHED IT. YAY FOR FINISHING THINGS.